#FridayFictioneers 04/27/12 – The Hunt

Madison gave an irresistible photo prompt this week:

Sunrise signaled the beginning of the hunt.

I ran hard for my freedom. I stopped short, my feet kicking up puffs of dirt.

Wicked barbed fencing hindered my escape. I scurried along the perimeter, searching for a break or weakness.

Perfect.

Coiled barb wire hung over a rail, but the fence changed to a flimsy grid of metal. I clambered over it, not quite destroying it in the process.

In the distance, a hound bayed. The hunters would find my tracks easily, but they’d made a mistake in their choice of prey.

I’d give them the hunt they craved. The hunt they’d never forget.

For as long as I let them live.

What do you think? I might have to explore and expand this tale. Check out more Fictioneers action over on Madison’s blog.

16 comments on “#FridayFictioneers 04/27/12 – The Hunt

  1. Oh wow, nice touch at the ending, the prey is in control! Here’s mine in case you’re interested:

    http://itsgonnagetweird.wordpress.com/2012/04/27/friday-fictioneers/

  2. Nice twist at the end. I went from feeling sorry for him (it?) to thinking the hunters would get theirs in the end.

    Mine is here: http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/04/26/flash-friday-fiction-9/

  3. Hunter and hunted, drawing them out. I feel for the hounds.

    Nicely done.

    Here’s mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/

  4. Nice twist at the end there. They’ll be exhausted by the time he’s finished playing with them and then …

    Nicely done.

    http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/04/27/trespass/

  5. Very nice — a good sense of the character’s confidence and power solidified quickly.

    Here’s my first attempt at one of these! http://pinionpost.com/2012/04/27/the-letter/

  6. You always have such strong protagonists, I just love it. Wish I could read about their ultimate demise.. Perhaps another day? Great job.

    Here’s mine: http://bit.ly/I78fA3

  7. I loved the twist at the end, as well as your smooth writing style. I’d love to read what happens next. Great Job.

    Mines at http://whimsicalquestsofacuriousmind.blogspot.com/2012/04/friday-fictioneers-fence.html

  8. Nice twist at the end. Here is my attempt…http://blog.tompoet.com/?p=312

  9. Ah yes…I have great respect for a story where the hunted becomes the hunter. Very nice. Thanks for sharing!

    ~Susan (here’s mine: http://www.susanwenzel.com)

  10. Well, you clearly have great control of the story, as does your main character. I like the idea of the hunted being in control and thought you rendered it well.

    I’m over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/04/27/friday-fiction-soul-memories/

  11. Bwahahahaha! Kick ass, girl! I love this role reversal and how there’s no fear in the narrator’s voice. Well done, Cara. :)

    Siobhan

  12. OMG–I loved the revelation that the hunted was actually in control. Neat twist. Very well done.

    Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

  13. Lora on said:

    Great… Didn’t expect the twist at the end. Yaaaay…The hunted is in control…now I want more.
    How strange…first one where I had to type in a password to comment. Here’s mine:
    http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

  14. Great! Loved the twist. Loved the lead-up to it. On the same note, love the layout of your blog.
    It’s interesting that I recently read about a true story, similar to this one, here: http://www.cracked.com/article_19492_the-5-most-badass-tales-wartime-survival_p2.html (Number 1 on the list, if you’re interested.)

    Here’s my take on the prompt: http://the-drabbler.com/trespass/

  15. So many good stories from this prompt! I loved your hunted-hunter giving his/her pursuers a run for their money. Sounds like a reckoning is not far off.

  16. Excellent! Really enjoyed this, a great twist at the end which makes me think ‘were-fox’ but would certainly like to know more. Definitely expand this if you can. Loved the ‘puffs of dirt’ line, too, all beautifully written and some great action build up.

    My entry is over here: http://joannakneilson.wordpress.com/2012/04/27/flash-fiction-friday-wire-pilgrimage/

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